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Everything and Nothing
- The One Who Can't Escape
- New York, United States
4 comments:
maybe, maybe not. "The Cold And Unexpected" sounds like it would be a great novel!
טלטול! ממצב? איך בעבודה ובישראל? את עוברת סופית??? אני
התכוונתי לקליפורניה*
Does the way the wind blows the trees in semi-circles
have anything to do with the pills you take five times a day, making your head scream for help, or is it just winter?
Just change has to have; forget the rest. For me, what you have there is pure excellence. No shit.
If you want to take it a step further, how 'bout:
The wind blows trees into semi-circles.
Does that have anything to do with the pills you take five times a day, making your head scream for help, or is it just winter, again?
I hope you take no offense. I do love a lot of your words. Sometimes, with poetry, you need to eliminate a lot to get to the core/the essence. Don't be shy. Hit the reader. Let it go. Eliminate the delicate stuff.
You are an excellent writer Tal. I'm just throwin' in my 2 cents. Take it or leave it. Ultimately, they are your words, your emotions. Continue to be strong.
PSM
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